J. Dawn King

Bestselling author of Jane Austen variations

Letter of the Law – Chapter 6

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  1. Oh Joy! I’m so confused now and this hasn’t helped at all. If Elizabeth isn’t suitable even though he does seem to think she fits the bill otherwise then how can he hope to find a bride in the neighbourhood?
    Hopefully he will be jealous of Richard who will see it and persuade him to marry her? Please. Please. Please!!!
    I know they will doubtless have problems but I would prefer them to face these as a married couple. And at least one of the problems won’t be losing custody of Georgiana.
    Bingley should listen to how rude Caroline is and exile her until she learns to behave or arrange a marriage with anyone who can stand her.
    If you need any more pointers please don’t hesitate to ask . (I’m sorry to be so interfering )

    • I’m going to pull a surprise potential candidate out of my bag in chapter 7. Once you see who it is (and, no it’s not Charlotte), you will think, “why didn’t I think of her?” Of course, he will be jealous of Richard. The story takes another twist at the end of the next chapter where Darcy is going to have to make a decision. They will definitely have problems, after all, we haven’t yet had Wickham show up (although he will as in canon) and Mr. Collins is on his way from Kent as I type this. That is if he doesn’t get lost. He’s not the smartest lunkhead in this story.

      You are completely correct about Bingley. I love your pointers and desperately hope you continue. You can’t imagine how they stimulate my grey matter. Although I’ve outlined the story, I’m always up for an adjustment or two – or more.

      Thanks for taking the time to comment. I LOVE it.

      • Oh no! I forgot about those two! Hopefully either Darcy or Richard will tell the truth about Wickham(or maybe Richard could just run him through )
        As for Mr Collins, if he’s not very smart he will suit Lydia .
        There you go I’m at it again, good job you are not offended

  2. The colonel arrives and Darcy finally opens his eyes, yeah. I do like a mean Caroline and a witless Mrs. Bennet in the stories I read. Having the colonel in the story from the beginning is a bonus. It makes Darcy realize his feelings sooner, even if there is more strife to come. I’ve always wanted a stronger Charles, one that stands up for Jane when his sisters starts their comments. Thanks I really enjoy these chapters, it makes me smile.

    • I LOVE making readers smile, Judy. Thanks so much for letting me know.

      In all honesty, Bingley has a few hard lessons to learn before he stands up to his sister. He will get it right in the end. At least, I hope so. Caroline Bingley is a snake. I HATE snakes. Mrs. Bennet is a goofball who will have very little impact on the overall story, I think. She is rather pushy and likes to have her fingers in the middle of things, doesn’t she? I only hope Lydia keeps away from Netherfield once she learns the colonel is there. She is a brat child!!!

  3. Joy,

    There’s nothing like the green eyed monster to mix things up a bit,to clear the murky fog that pervaded one’s senses and allow one to see what was before their eyes all along!!
    Hope the Col. works his magic and that Darcy and Luzxy gain a better understanding of each other. Can’t wait to read the next chapter.
    I’m loving this!! ❤️
    Thank you!!!

  4. I love it when the Colonel arrives early in the story! Maybe he’ll give Darcy just the prod he needs in the right direction. Elizabeth’s put down of Caroline was just…..delicious. I can almost taste the relish Elizabeth must have felt when she asked Caroline that question!

    Sounds as if we’re in for some fun and possibly even some shenanigans (I love that word) when our friends (!) Collins and Wickham arrive. Bring it on!

  5. I’m loving this, Joy! The premise is fertile territory for a gifted author like you. Darcy obviously has a ways to go before his attitude about HAVING to marry a well-dowered, titled lady changes. And where is Elizabeth supposed to find someone like that for him in Meryton? So absurd that Darcy is looking for that kind of pedigree in the country– Should have stayed in London if it’s that important to him!

    • I’m so glad, Debbie. I’ve had this story on the back burner for a while and am so happy to be finally getting it into order. Thank you for your kind words.

      Darcy! Darcy! Darcy! The man is smart but clueless. He’s like my husband who never wanted anything but a Chevrolet. Then the Ford F-350 came out with a turbo diesel with four doors. You can’t imagine the struggle before he FINALLY decided to purchase. Twenty-two years later he still has a Ford pickup. Sometimes it takes extraordinary measures for a man to change his standards and realize they were ridiculous in the first place. That’s where our Darcy is. Silly fellow!

      Hang on for chapter 7 and you will see who I have in mind. I can’t believe someone hasn’t yet guessed (or, let the cat out of the bag). I’m writing it now and hope to post tomorrow or Saturday. I can’t wait to see what Elizabeth does. She is as silly as he is.

  6. Haha! The Colonel is smooth and I’m so glad Elizabeth gave him such a smile! Let the worm of jealousy work on Darcy. Jane knows her sister though. As much as Elizabeth doth protest, she is definitely intrigued with him now. Why not let the cat among the pigeons…Lydia will have the Colonel running for the hills or he will teach her a lesson she wont soon forget! But you having me thinking about this ‘other person’…I’m going to have to think about that…the only one coming to mind is the freckled face Miss King!

    • Congratulations! You are absolutely correct about Miss King. However, Lydia isn’t ready to make an appearance yet. I need the colonel to stick around for a bit. Great idea, however.

  7. I thought of Mary King just prior to reading it. I just cannot see it, but I will be very interested to read how it plays out.

    I was not thinking of the Colonel when you mentioned hero. I thought he was out of the story. Now jealousy will cause all kinds of shenanigans. Looking forward to reading the drama to come.

  8. Oh, this is just too fun! Darcy with a deadline, and,now Colonel Fitzwilliam enters to stir the pot. Thank you for sharing this delightful story!

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